notes

Poems should reflect their tone, their values:

3 poems precede this note.

They are not perfect, they are rough and rushed, like lives struggled through.

Their syntax is bordering on hectic, the chaos of the dark.

The words chosen aren't always the best, mistakes and poor choices are part of humanity.

Rhyming is constant, repetitive, it goes through the motions other than a complete infrequent discontinuation. Much like the rhythm in our daily lives.

The personification of the darkness, and the swapping between darkness being something evil or something to cherish. This reflects the emotions in our lives, the times we want to shine and be seen and run from the dark, versus when we want to hide, put on a mask and be invisible.

Word choice switches between childlike words, to overly complex. We all want and try to become a child again, but sometimes we feel we must attempt to be considered mature and intelligent, but as an act. The words who's meanings are slightly off reflect this.

We rise from hiding from the spotlight, to wanting to be seen, until an event drives us back down to the dark safety blanket.

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